So, I made that joke while watching a LoL stream you might find it lame, others might find it funny.

Once I talked with a friend.. And then the conversation ended.

What do you think? How can I improve my joke? Im going on a contest with it, so any suggestions are welcome.

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that joke cant be improved

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Of course it can be, that's why i left the jokes between the 2 sentences

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Because it's already perfect

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XDDD Alright, that now is funny mate, thanks i'll change the a bit the joke, everyone can post multiple different sentences or remake the whole joke, using " I once talked with a fried of mine".

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This one time... At band camp... I played my instrument normally, following my sheet music.

The humor in that, and likewise in the OP's joke, is the humor of the violated expectation. You expect there to be a joke, so when there basically isn't one, it's a brand of humor. In mine it's only pertinent to people that have seen American Pie or the memes from it, you expect something off the wall/obscene to follow, but instead there is the normal act to follow which violates the expectation.

It's a brand of humor that basically revolves around cognitive dissonance and self fulfilling prophecy. The joke violates the expectations of the audience, which instigates cognitive dissonance. Because the audience is primed to find things funny, watching a comedy show, they resolve the dissonance by subconsciously telling themselves it was funny, and thus they laugh. The more people begin to laugh, the more it encourages others to follow suite.

The reality is that the OP's setup is all that fails. There's not enough priming the audience to find it funny, so when it has to stand on it's own like that, it falls flat.

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No need to improve anything, it's perfect that way. Sober, short, powerful.

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Your name is perfect for this post.

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+1

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+1

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+1

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+1 :D

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Hm, there is the remade joke.

I once talked with a frined of mine. Then the conversation ended. A bird egg fell on my head. The guy from sniper elite 3 shot the egg and my friend died from heart attack seeing the egg falling apart.

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Don't quit your day job.

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One day i'll be rich and i wont need a job. I'll just make people laugh and make money.

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Okay, THAT made me laugh. :)

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Aye, It ended because he shitted hisself, and the situation became awkward,so everyone went to his own way.The bird egg fall onto my head, because of the wind which blew it and it fell on my head, but didn't broke. The guy from Sniper Elite is there, because you know that flash games, which you have to hit the apple on a human's head with a bow for example, well Sniper >> precision>> egg, i hope i explained mysellf good enough, I'm bad at english, but I try my best

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Liked more the original one :)

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I think the Op is on drugs., because that is certainly not a joke.

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I think you meant this

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Hello.

I once talk with a friend of mine but somehow he transformed into Cthulhu. And then, due to a lack of my knowledge of ancient languages from outer space, the conversation ended. The life on Earth as well.

Thank you, you are great audience.

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You can't say Cthulhu without saying fhtagn.

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I can't, that's the point! T_T

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Cthuhlu jokes give nightmares.

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Once I talked with a friend... Then we became friends.

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I made a friend.

And then I woke up.

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You can also write your own jokes if you have ones, to keep the topic going :)

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I don't get it.

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I suppose he died. Otherwise it's not a joke at all.

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A girl rolled her eyes at me, so I rolled them back.

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Once I talked with a friend. After we finished the conversation, I put the phone away. Then it struck me that I have no friends. THEN WHO WAS PHONE?

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