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Spread the pain spread it wide

The Messenger

shadows gather round
waiting to see
angels stand chained
while innocence flees
there are but a chosen few
messenger wipe the tears from your eyes
for cant you see we are just flesh
he's dying for you
the future born as he dies
from the darkness where there is no light
for light is nothing without dark
so why does the light take your sight
whispered nightmares
brought forth on the wings of night
pure evil shows his face
shadows gather closer
his life they wish to taste
his life ebbs slowly
he fights to hold on
but the darkness that surrounds him
freezes him to the bone

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I like the last six lines. The intro part is a little more confusing, I can't tell if there are multiple "hes" or who/what the messenger is - aside from the direct reference with angels.

9 years ago
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Follow the direct reference. Think "forgive them for they know not what they do".

9 years ago
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Sure, if it's a religious poem it's understandable. But I would argue the content is inaccurate here and there. For instance, contrast http://biblehub.com/john/19-30 with your line / he fights to hold on /.

9 years ago
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Yeah it is but that's what I have artistic license for :p

9 years ago
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Goodness me.. Enjoyed reading, thank you.

9 years ago
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Good poems nightswallow22 !!

Thanks again for the train :-)

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Your pain is my pain
We shall spread it far and wide
Hand in hand

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thx

9 years ago
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OMG! thank you so much!

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