Deal?
I took a quick look at your game's store page, and I can see tons of grammatical and cohesion errors. Please, I don't mean to be a dick here, but just give the store page a little more love. It's literally what's selling your game. I would point out what I found, but I don't have the time right now (the errors are pretty obvious).
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Yes. As I said, I didn't want to be a dick, and I'm sorry if I came out as one. I just genuinely wanted to help, because a store page like that just scare the customers away.
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Keatz - The Lonely Bird is a 2D old school action platformer that tells the story of a lonely bird, Keatz, who was abandoned by society because of his inability to fly like other birds can. The government of Heavens, the place where all birds live, suddenly and unexpectedly came up with a decision of eliminating all the flightless birds from the country by any means necessary, because they were deemed useless.
Keatz wanted to make a room for himself for when everything was falling apart. One day, he came across another flightless bird, who soon became his friend and a part of his life. They were in peace for a few days, until an attack by Heavens's soldiers shattered their ease. Keatz then decided to start a journey against the corruption and social evils, including the decision made by the Heavens's government to exile all birds who could't fly.
"Will Keatz be able to protect all flightless birds? Will he be able to protect his best friend?"
It is a mystery which remains unsolved...
Story Driven.
Two possible endings based on decisions taken.
Challenging situations, traps and various kinds of enemies.
6 Full Chapters divided into 20 single-player levels.
Two different worlds - "Real world" and "Dream World", which are interconnected.
A weapon with 3 firing modes, including Primary Firing mode, Rocket Launcher mode and Laser mode.
Spinner Blades available for killing multiple enemies at once.
4 challenging bosses.
Collect Special Items including Golden Leaf, Time Machine, gems, money and more!
Enemies have multiple kinds of deadly weapons, each with their unique loot.
6 lives to begin with and the ability to collect more lives in the special levels.
There you go. I fully reformatted your game's page, including fixes to grammar, cohesion and overall reading pace. You can type what you have in your page right now and this version into notepad+ to see all the changes.
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Again, I don't mean to be a dick, but many of the errors I fixed are still left in the store's page. Just take a look at the first line - "Keatz -The Lonely Bird". See how there's no space between "-" and "The"? I don't mind if you fully copy and paste my work, that's actually what I did it for. But if you don't want to, then you're gonna need some more effort into fixing the page. I'm just pointing out (again) that the text in the store's page is not good.
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I see all your achievements are named with underscores. Assuming that's not a stylistic choice, you probably thought you had to do it that way in order to call ISteamUserStats::SetAchievement().
That's actually not the case. If you go to the page where you defined the achievements, you can set a "display name" to differ from the API name. The display name is what people see through Steam while the API name is what you call in code.
You can find out more here: Achievement API
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Somewhat better:
Keatz -The Lonely Bird is a 2D Old School action platformer based on the story of the lonely bird who has been abandoned society. The Government of Heavens, a country where all kinds of birds live, suddenly and unexpectedly decide to eliminate all the flightless birds from the country by any means necessary because they were deemed useless.
Keatz was abandoned by his society because of his inability to fly like other birds when “The “Government of Heavens" decided to eliminate all flightless birds residing in their country. Keatz decided to start a journey against the corruption, social evil of and the dumb decision made by the Heavens Government. He wanted to make space for himself when everything was falling apart. One day, he came across another flightless bird that soon became his friend and a part of his life. His life changed for the better until they were attacked by The Government of Heavens' soldiers.
"Will Keatz be able to protect all flightless birds? Will he be able to protect his best friend who became the part of his life?"
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Indeed. In my opinion, that way it got much better.
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Keatz - The Lonely Bird is a 2D old school action platformer that tells the story of a lonely bird, Keatz, who has been abandoned by society because of his inability to fly like other birds. The "Government of Heavens", the place where all birds live, suddenly and unexpectedly came up with a decision to eliminate all the flightless birds from the country by any means necessary, because they were deemed useless.
Keatz wanted to make space for himself for when everything was falling apart. One day, he came across another flightless bird, who soon became his friend and a part of his life. They were able to live in peace for a few days, until an attack by Heavens's soldiers shattered their lives. Keatz decided to start a journey against the corruption and social evils, including the decision made by the Heavens's government to exile all birds who could not fly.
"Will Keatz be able to protect all flightless birds? Will he be able to protect his best friend?"
It is a mystery which remains unsolved...
Story Driven
Two possible endings based on player decisions
Challenging situations, traps and various kinds of enemies
6 Full Chapters divided into 20 single-player levels
Two different worlds - "Real World" and "Dream World", which are interconnected
A weapon with 3 firing modes, including Primary Firing mode, Rocket Launcher mode and Laser mode
Spinner Blades available for killing multiple enemies at once
4 challenging bosses
Collect Special Items including Golden Leaf, Time Machine, gems, money and more!
Enemies have multiple kinds of deadly weapons, each with their unique loot
6 lives to begin with and the ability to collect more lives in the special levels
Reformatted an slightly edited version of SomeoneTookMyUsername :-)
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My pleasure - I wish more devs would ask for help here when they are posting new games on Steam cause it's sad when the descriptions are badly written and this detracts from users wanting to check out a game with a badly written introduction. Good luck with your game sales!
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Like STMU (The first reply), I'm not impressed.
Also looked at your other Title Nightmare Z.
Unfinished crapware, that one.
Low/No support & seems abandoned.
Time will tell with the reviews and "support" with this Bird title.
Please don't be another greedy Crapware pusher on Steam.
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Well, NightmareZ was my first attempt to make a game for such a big platform and it was created in 2016. I tried my best to improve it and provided 5 patches after the game was released on Steam. I still plan to release a final patch for the game anytime soon.
I learned a lot from the first game and the Steam community members provided me with a lot of constructive feedback. I worked on my second game called Keatz: The Lonely Bird, for about a year and tried my best to make it as good as possible. Creating all the assets and programming takes a lot of time and effort let alone play testing and publishing.
There are some customers who enjoyed NightmareZ too and I agree with the fact that different people have different tastes. Some people will like it while others don't. :)
P.S: I am not one of the devs who wants to exploit Steam users or Steam system in general and I am just trying to improve my skills so that I can make better games in the future. My primary goal is to make my customers happy before anything else.
Thank you! If you have further queries, feel free to ask me.
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Hello everyone,
I hope, it is allowed to post Steam deals in this section on Steamgifts. If not feel free to remove the post. I am a developer of this game and I have just released it on Steam which is available at 25% discount.
Get Keatz: The Lonely Bird here: http://store.steampowered.com/app/707320/Keatz_The_Lonely_Bird/
Keatz The Lonely Bird is a 2D Old School Platform action game based on the story of the lonely bird who has been abandoned by the society.
Please feel free to comment.
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